Friday, July 27, 2012

She Certainly Does


I was taken on a Tuesday.  Mid September.  A magical time, when seasons kiss, dawning golds and yellows. Yet, autumn frost ever threatens to cage my memories.  I have a story to tell.
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Trifextra Week Twenty-Six-
"give us a 33-word opening line to your book."
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19 comments:

  1. the imagery was fantastic in so few words, i especially liked the idea of 'when seasons kiss'.
    i would like to know this story to be told.

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  2. yeah, "taken" is ordinarily a passive, vanilla word, but not so here. wanna know more about that!

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    1. Exactly! I toyed with more dominant words, but taken just fit. The K and the T gives just a touch of forceful vulnerability.

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  3. defintely need another 75, 000 words or so

    striking 33, well done

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    1. I'm working on it. Playing tortoise at the moment. Skeletons and outlines abound...

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  4. Yeah, I loved how you chose TAKEN and I need more words now. Yay, reading you is fun!

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  5. Ok. I'm in. Where do I read the rest?

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  6. I agree...the word that sucked me in was "taken" -- I want to know where? by whom? willingly?

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  7. I'd want to read this! For the 'taking' part at least, although I bet she really does have a story to tell!

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  8. This reminds me of The Lovely Bones in its haunting start. I'm in.

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  9. Loved everything about this, but most especially "seasons kiss". Terrific.

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  10. Love the "seasons kiss" too and the mystery of "taken" - I want to know more!

    Anna :o]

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  11. That first sentence has great force to it -- it could mean so many things, it definitely draws the reader on.

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  12. I love the last line: "I have a story to tell." Totally drew me in.

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  13. I love the imagery just before the declaration--the two make me want to discover the 'caged memories'!

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  14. I'm with Trudging--taken is a great word, but coming right out and telling us you have a story to tell? Thank god. Some of the books I've read seem to be lacking that. I love the urgency; it makes me want to take heed, pay attention, pour another cup of joe and settle in. Nice job.

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  15. Great 33! Just joined in on the fun and posted mine.

    New follower and lover of what I'm reading on here!

    xo

    Christine

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  16. I think there are a lot of people who love this type of genre, and I wish you lots of success with it.

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  17. Oooh. "When seasons kiss" is an evocative image. Love the hook of the first line.

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