Friday, May 11, 2012

Scar

A mother espies her unclothed reflection,
naked flesh-covering marred.
Eyes trace her outline,
drifting through untouchable time.
Flexed and firm,
now undone-
muscle given to softness.
Finger draws her scar,
she remembers.
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Trifextra Weekend ChallengeYour challenge is to write anything you want, in whichever form you please, so long as your response is exactly 33 words and includes the word "mother."

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12 comments:

  1. Nicely done... Its lyrical!

    Happy Mother's Day! :)

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  2. beautiful. I saw a pic on fb this morning that had similar sentiment. We love the memories of the life we held within. :)

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  3. There's 10 tiems more than 33 words here. I can relate to the scar. I bet its beautiful.

    excellent, Goddess

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  4. "drifting through untouchable time" ... Nice.

    I like the vagueness here. She could be remembering giving birth to a healthy baby, having a C-section, or losing a child. Anything is possible; scars are born from many types of wounds.

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  5. I check out my scar, too, and remember:) Well done!

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  6. The physical reminder of how we are changed by motherhood can be both a bitch and a gift.
    Thanks for playing. Don't forget to come back for the new prompt on Monday.

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  7. Turning an ugly thing into a pretty thing. Nice.

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  8. Beautiful. Absolutely sublime.

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  9. I liked the way you made the scar a turning point in the story - whether from sorrow to joy or sorrow to deeper sorrow is impossible to say, but the change is clear in her finger tracing and the line 'she remembers'.

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