Sunday, May 6, 2012

Dead Man's Float

Preservation.  
Idle saccharine survival.  
'Let down your hair, lovely princess.  
I shall save you.' 
Drift and breathe,
precious flotsam treasure in the surf. 
Under the aegis of languor and lies,
'pine for me, waiting girl.'
You are called for naught but sweetness, 
loved for naught but lips,
bred for naught but lady feet,
held for naught but a shimmering dress. 
Your knight,
his devil's coat shines,
looks valiant along the horizon
for his woman atoll 
to catch the sun, 
a beacon beggar
on a feather sail
whisper
for rigor mortis rescue.
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My first foray into Magpie Tales

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12 comments:

  1. dang another fine use of grit and language...

    You are called for naught but sweetness,
    loved for naught but lips,
    bred for naught but lady feet,
    held for naught but a shimmering dress.

    ugh...what a life eh?

    beggar beacon feather sail rigor mortis...whew...way to bend words...

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    1. nice to see you at OpenLinkNight as well...smiles...

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  2. You words give this poem so much texture.
    Just great.

    =)

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  3. your words were rough, yet beautifully constructed a piece of harsh truth that may lie await for some

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  4. Your first Magpie? Hard to believe... well done my friend!

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  5. Brought back the story of Ophelia...

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  6. You are a talented poetess. It reminds how women were treated in the long past but honestly, they're many treated this way now. How sad.

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  7. The wordplay was very enjoyable to read. This is a retelling of the Rapunzel fable with a very modern feel to it, and one for adults. The reality behind the fables, which make us wake up from the dream of innocence and see the world of experience that can be so brutal, your poem turns our eyes that way to see what's behind the curtain.

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  8. Worthy of reading ... more than one time!!!

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  9. Very cool! I like this a lot. :)

    These are my favorites:
    "Under the aegis of languor and lies"
    "loved for naught but lips"
    "whisper for rigor mortis rescue"

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